17 March 2014

Haiku 2012/76

subtle moon, to shine
afternoons, in the face of
the obvious sun

(Alternate version:

silly moon, to shine
afternoons, in the face of
the obvious sun

:any preferences?)

3 comments:

Michael Strickland said...

I vote for subtle, even though I love the word silly.

Patrick J. Vaz said...

Thanks for the thoughts; I'm inclined to agree.

Unknown said...

I like them both, and they're so different. One word, that's all it takes. Sorry, can't decide, but I can say that my life is much more full of silly moons than subtle ones.
V