17 March 2014

Haiku 2012/76

subtle moon, to shine
afternoons, in the face of
the obvious sun

(Alternate version:

silly moon, to shine
afternoons, in the face of
the obvious sun

:any preferences?)
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3 comments:

Civic Center said...

I vote for subtle, even though I love the word silly.

10:16 AM, March 18, 2014
Patrick J. Vaz said...

Thanks for the thoughts; I'm inclined to agree.

6:32 PM, March 18, 2014
Unknown said...

I like them both, and they're so different. One word, that's all it takes. Sorry, can't decide, but I can say that my life is much more full of silly moons than subtle ones.
V

9:24 PM, March 18, 2014

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